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Is this inverted thesis statement for an essay I’m writing too confusing?





Because it is hypocritical that the government trusts 18-year-old adolescents with bigger responsibilities than drinking, that soldiers under the age of twenty-one are prohibited while risking their lives, and that the effects of alcohol are no more harmful than those that result from smoking cigarettes, the minimum drinking age should be lowered to eighteen.



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4 Responses so far.

  1. Oldsmobile says:

    i think you should have a . after drinking, drop, that, start a new sentence with soldiers, it may make it a little easier to follow, but if I’m going to risk my life, I believe being sober a great advantage to my survival.

  2. dogrusu says:

    No not at all btw that is true.

  3. whooplas says:

    Its not confusing……… I do agree its complete bull**** that someone serving our country can’t enjoy a beer. That’s wrong. BUT I don’t think the age limit for drinking should be lowered. Im not sure how soliders under 18 could legally drink but im not making the laws so the gov. Could figure that one out.

  4. diductor says:

    It’s WAY too long.Also, you’ll create a reader bias in your favor if you argue against lowering the drinking age.Almost every student argues FOR it.